by FlyinFish » March 2nd, 2010, 11:12 am
Pete, here are a few quick thoughts. I'm very anal about presentations and writing. Take it all with a grain of salt. Most my comments are notional. I'm not very educated on these rods, but most of your clients won't be.
The homepage bores me to death for two reasons. First, it opens up to a page of full text and paragraphs. That makes me want to not be on that page. Second, the main thing that draws my eye is a rod at the top, disassembled. That image with a bunch of text makes it feel like a specific page, like you're getting into details. You need to show your logo larger, an AWESOME photo of a rod either in bend or some other cool shot showing it's beauty, and then have some profound quote or maybe a few simple lines about the awesomeness of custom rods, bamboo rods, your rods, whatever. A picture of a rod in the build process showing your great workshop/area may also be good, with you hunched over a rod or something.
The greenish/light blueish colored text is weird and doesn't appear well on the dark background. The dark background is ok, but I'd give it a slightly bluer color and change the text color to something more readable.
In general, the pages are text heavy. Detailed descriptions are good, but put some short general statements in bold or a different color. Showcase your SKILLS as a rod builder and also which skills are critical for the different types of rods (glass, boo, graphite). The descriptions are cool for that rod build, but as a customer I want to know about things like spine finding, your eye for selecting good looking threads, patterns or weaves, inlays, guide spacing, ferrules, cork options, clamp options, etc. With each rod example, point out what your skill was in that step of the build. Also, the picture are nice, but get some full length pictures, or some casting shots or in bend. This is hard as *, I know, but just keep it in the back of your mind. Maybe find a nice plain backdrop to take casting photos in? I dunno... Also, if you "happen to show" parts of your work area in the background, it can be very impressive.
For example "Steffen Brothers Glass in Full Flex" is great. It shows an awesome picture, and the key words like "full flex" suggest characteristics of a fiberglass rod. And the blurb is great too, but also put something in there about how you can help me select the right glass rod for me with length and action and then wrap it with precise spine finding and guide selection and spacing to give me the smoothest casts. Or something like that.
Again, take my thoughts with a grain of salt and pick out what you think might be helpful and jive with your goals. I like most of the shots that are there and they make me want more rods!!